50 Shades of Wretch

So, today at the day job, I read an article (which seems to have since disappeared - will link when I find it) by the "author" of Jane Eye Laid Bare, Eve Sinclair*, defending the book and her choices in writing it.

A lot of the article had to do with eroticism and how 50 Shades of Grey is liberating for women, and people shouldn't be ashamed to read erotic books and eroticism is different from porn, etc, etc. - and for the first half of the article, I could kind of see what she was saying.  I have zero problem with people reading whatever they want  and even though the snippets of 50 Shades I've come across are enough to make me want to stick a fish fork up my nose and wiggle it rigorously to erase all traces of the prose from my brain, my attitude tends to be, just because I find something distasteful doesn't mean other people ought not to enjoy it. I agree with her about the porn**, I have no issue at all with porn, be it on paper or film.

In (roughly) the second half of the article, Sinclair defends her reasons for essentially hijacking a classic novel for her own gain.  Except, her reasons are ridiculous.  Firstly, that Jane Eyre is already a pretty erotic novel.  Well, yes.  So why the need to wave the this part is sexy banner?  Why would you want to take something subtle and replace it with something in-your-face?  That's something like taking a perfectly seasoned turkey and then coating it in a thick paste of ground thyme because, well, everyone likes thyme and anyway, it already had some thyme and that tasted really good.  This concept of sticking porn into classic novels has to be the best argument for leave well enough alone I've ever heard.

The other main reason she gives for her book is that no one had a problem with Pride and Prejudice and Zombies - and I agree that anyone who was OK with that should be OK with this.  I had a huge problem with it.  Just to be clear, I didn't read it.  Possibly the zombie scenes were perfectly integrated and the changes and additions were as brilliantly written as the rest.  I kind of doubt it, but that's not the point.  Pride and Prejudice is my all-time favourite book.  I have read it either 12.5 or 13.5 times (it does get a bit difficult to keep track) and even though it sounds cliched, every time I read it, I find something new, some new meaning that has previously escaped me, some facet of one of the mains' characters that suddenly makes everything clearer.  To add to it is to destroy it.  Since I'm on a roll with the similes, let's throw in a metaphor. Say you have something perfect and wonderful, an extremely elegant, perfectly cut, expensive designer gown - and  let's say you also have something popular and kind of cool, some interesting buttons from an old woolly sweater... THERE IS NO REASON TO COMBINE THESE THINGS - but the horrendous hipster gown of doom effect is not really my problem with P&P&Z or with JELB.  My problem isn't even with the insane amount of hubris someone would need to read the originals and think Meh, I could do better.  My problem is that hubris combined with riding the coattails of an excellent author who is dead and can't defend themselves.  Seriously, try that shit with an author who's still alive, why don't you?  Or, better yet, make up your own universe, throw in some of your own characters, and see where that takes you.

*Is this supposed to sound like some sort of twisted nursery rhyme?
**Sinclair calls it eroticism.  I say naked people engaged in sex acts = porn, but that's just semantics.

Quicksand - Part 22

They had never talked about what happened in the warehouse. Craven had offered a weak So...? at the time, which Minty had silently declined. They had walked together a long time and, eventually, Craven Lorne had found some glue and put Minty back together.

Craven had assumed they would go their separate ways once Minty was fixed, but it wasn't so. When he'd suggested it, Minty had simply said, No, Craven Lorne in her creepy, hollow voice and that had been the end of the discussion. Craven was surprised to find that he was glad. He realized sometime later that she had spared him the indignity of asking her to stay with him; as time had passed, he'd found himself distressingly fond of her company.

Craven Lorne hadn't gone back to raiding. He had stopped using Dust altogether. It would be nice to think that he'd learned his lesson, turned a moral corner; he thought maybe he had. But the real reason—or the vast majority of the real reason—was that he didn't want to end up a stain on some other warehouse floor. And while Minty's arm was mended, he knew her well enough now to know she'd snap her hand off at the wrist if she thought it was necessary – and he knew he'd never know her well enough to know what she might consider necessary.

They walked together now, hand in hand, his dewclaw passing gently back and forth over the tiny raised cracks along the side of her index finger. They were in the field. Their field. The field where he first saw her. The field where he always saw her.

The tree was a ways in the distance, casting a tiny circle of calm, cool shade. Craven thought about sitting there with Voss. He wondered, not for the first time, what would have happened if he'd said something to Voss sooner, before Minty had stopped and smiled at him. Would they have been together? Would Voss have avoided the injuries that made him a monster? Even if Voss had refused him, surely Minty would have avoided Craven's wrath, his misguided blame would have at least landed somewhere else.

Minty followed his gaze to the tree, and, in her worrying way, looked like she knew what he was thinking. She had never told him about the rape. She couldn't find it in her to destroy the very little that was left of Voss in Craven's heart. She would, one day, when she'd figured out how. She stepped closer to Craven, pushing the cool porcelain of her arm against his white cotton shirt.

They stood for a long time, staring at the tree, each lost in their own thoughts.

“That day,” Minty said, in her weird, echoing voice. He knew exactly which day she meant. “That day I smiled. Craven Lorne, I smiled at you.”

This brings us to the end of Part I of III; the next draft will see pieces from all three parts together, giving it an even less linear feel, but for now, we say goodbye to Craven and Minty.  Next week we meet Sally and Daisy Chain.  

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Quicksand - Part 21

Voss dragged himself toward his cane.

Craven Lorne stepped forward to help him, then recoiled when he realized what he was doing. “I'm sorry,” he told Voss. “I had to. You need help.” He looked back at Minty, who was watching the scene curiously, her Dust bleeding and pooling around her feet. “How long did you have her here? Chained up. She's half naked. Look what you've become.”

Voss's head dropped. “I'm sorry,” he whispered. “Craven, I'm so sorry.”

Craven Lorne's heart melted. He stepped forward and leaned down to help his friend—to help what had been rather than what now was.

The cane seemed to extend in length to reach Voss's hand. It cracked down hard on Craven's ankle and rapped the the back of his knees, knocking him to the warehouse floor before its pommel hit his cheek.

Voss was on his feet, and Craven, who had rolled to save Minty's arm, was on his back. Voss brought his cane down hard on Craven Lorne's head, causing his body to go limp. Voss looked down at former friend with something almost like pity. “You left me no choice,” he said. He spun on his heel and strode toward Minty, his smile not seen, but felt.

Minty backed toward the corner of the room, desperate to run but unwilling to leave Craven Lorne behind. She tried to shrink, to melt into the wall as Voss advanced. His steps were slow and deliberate, but not laboured. He held his cane at his side, but didn't touch it to the floor. Memories and shadows surrounded her. She couldn't move, couldn't shout out. She couldn't even hold her arm up to stop him. He raised his cane.

The growl started low. It rolled across the warehouse floor. It rolled through the lies and the shadows, it rolled over Voss. It broke at Minty's feet, washed over her, warmed her and turned into a scream.

Craven Lorne was in the air before Voss had turned. He landed, expertly, with his hands and feet on Voss's shoulders, knocking his former friend over, smashing his head into the concrete floor.

Voss's cane rolled to a slow stop at Minty's feet. She did not pick it up.

Craven, who was still perched on Voss's shoulders, looked up at her. “You're shaking,” he told her. “We need to go.” He didn't look down at Voss's face or at the dust leaking from the wound at the back of his head. He wanted to, but he didn't.

He stood, grabbed Minty by her arm and pulled her toward the exit, ignoring Voss's quiet, murmured threats.

Something went crunch.

“Leaving so soon?” asked a voice that seeped out of the shadows like tar. Yellow eyes reflected light that wasn't there.

If he squinted, Voss could make out the shape of Minty's arm, its fingers crushed under a heavy boot.

“It wasn't too nice, what you were saying about me,” Frisco said, making imaginary tut, tut noises. “It wasn't too nice at all. You called me a maniac.”

Craven reached out and swept Minty behind him. “I didn't,” he said slowly. “But I should have.”

“And you think you're going to protect her now? Now that I know what she is? I've never liked you, I just put up with you because Voss wanted you around and he was good about the Dust. But I don't need either one of you now that I've got her.”

“He drank my Dust, Craven Lorne,” Minty said. “I made it white. But he had it.”

Craven did not take the time to ask how Minty had done the impossible and changed the colour of her Dust or to get angry that Frisco, of all people, had been allowed to taste it. Every part of him was focused on how they could escape – because if Frisco had had even a little white Dust, fighting him was going to be impossible.

“Kill him,” Voss croaked, struggling to sit up. Only Minty wondered who he was talking to. “Kill him,” Voss repeated, “and I'll share her with you.”

Frisco lifted his foot off of Minty's hand and walked to where is boss lay, his head surrounded by a halo of its own Dust. “So yours is white, too?” Frisco said. “Guess I should have known that.” He knelt down by Voss's side.

Craven Lorne motioned to Minty and they crept, as soundlessly as possible, along the wall.

“You'd really do that, share her with me?” There was something menacing in Frisco's voice – more menacing than usual.

Craven considered trying to help, but he knew that if he stayed, he was dead – and so was Minty. The best he could do was hope that Frisco would make it quicker than Voss deserved.

Voss couldn't imagine what was coming because he couldn't imagine a universe in which he was not the centre, not looked up to and admired, not revered. He nodded his head, as much as he could. “Yes. But be quick about it, don't let them get away.”

Frisco wrapped his long, spidery fingers around Voss's neck and squeezed, occasionally moving a hand to slap away Voss's feeble attempts to stop him. “You would have kept her all for yourself,” he said, as Voss's leggs stopped kicking. “You would have drained her dry and not even saved a grain for me.” He bent down and lapped up some of the dust.

Too much, Craven thought. There was no way to escape Frisco now, not with fresh white Dust in his system. Minty would be lucky if she bled to death before he got his hands on her.

Frisco looked up, as if he'd heard Craven Lorne thinking, as if the thought had reminded him that Craven and Minty were still there.

Craven could see only one option and he didn't like it. Still, he told himself, it was his mess and this was the only way it was going to get cleaned up. As quietly as he could, so that the sound barely existed, he told Minty to run. And he ran.

Craven didn't run for the door; he ran for Frisco, as fast as he could, his teeth bared. Frisco stood his ground until the last second, looking – if he looked anything – mildly amused. As Craven pounced, Frisco melted. He appeared behind Craven and Craven faltered as he tried to bite something that was no longer there. Frisco hit him from behind, but not as hard as he might have. He was toying with him. He dug his long fingers into a nerve cluster in Craven's shoulders and laughed at the resulting whimper.

Craven couldn't see Minty and he wouldn't let himself look around to try to spot her. He wanted to keep Frisco's attention on him and that meant keeping himself alive long enough for Minty to get away – and that meant keeping his attention on Frisco. He bit him once or twice, but Frisco just melted and poured and oozed and seeped; it was like fighting with molasses.

It didn't take long for Frisco to get bored and when he did, he was merciless. He hooked too fingers behind Craven's jaw and yanked forward, sending Craven face-first into the concrete. He kicked Craven in the ribs so hard that Craven coughed up a bit of dust, the colour of ground pewter.

And then he wrapped his hands around Craven's neck.

Frisco had been watching Minty all along. He could see her still, out of the corner of his eye, frozen, too scared to run. And even if she did run, he'd caught her once, and that was before he'd had her dust, before he'd had Voss's. Hell, even this pewter shit of Craven's would give him an edge. He'd catch her again. If he needed to.

Minty saw Frisco smile as he put his hands around Craven Lorne's neck. She wanted to run, but her feet wouldn't move. Her head wouldn't even turn to look at the open door behind her. She was frozen. Frisco was delighted, not watching her, but watching Craven struggle as Voss had done. He lifted his Craven's head and pushed it back onto the floor, then stood and pressed his heel into the base of Craven's neck.

Minty felt dizzy from Dust loss, disoriented, weak – and she felt everything build, the dizziness and the weakness and her body's refusal to move, the pain, everything. It compounded, layer upon layer of sickness and hate and helplessness and fear, filling her from her feet up to her chest, crushing her. She raised what should have been her arm. She let go.

Despite everything, Minty had had the foresight to disengage her eye. Craven had been fortunate enough to be face-down and half conscious. Only Frisco, smiling his sick grin at Minty's raised stump – at what her perceived to be a plea for mercy – had seen it, the ball of white hot light that rolled down the hollow of Minty's arm and burst forward, streaking across the warehouse like a flash bomb. His eyes somehow managed to survive long enough to see what happened as he tried to melt and instead was baked to the spot. He went blind. He felt his eyes and skin turn to ash. He felt himself fall away, one piece at a time.

Minty walked to Craven Lorne and lifted him bodily to his feet. She retrieved her arm and handed it too him wordlessly, then bent to pick up her fingers. Craven took them from her and put them in her pocket, too surprised to say anything, too distracted by the smear that had been Frisco to argue.

They walked toward the doorway, the yellow rectangle that so recently had seemed the answer to all their problems. They heard Frisc— slide into a worried co as the figure of a possum in a bowler hat skidded around the corner and took in the scene.

Minty raised her empty arm—her cannon at him. She could feel it all building.

Her eye focused on Darren, too scared to move, too stupid to get out of his own way. She pitied him. She lowered her arm and jerked her head to the side, indicating that he should run, run fast and run far.

They walked out of the warehouse hand in hand, though Craven might have felt less awkward about it if Minty's hand had had all its fingers and been attached to more than a deceptively heavy arm. The sun was rising or setting – or something. The sky was in transition and it wasn't the only thing.

Quicksand - Part 20

Minty's scream echoed through the warehouse long after she had stopped. Craven Lorne pulled her to her feet and picked up her stricken arm, holding it delicately above the wrist. “Let's go,” he told her. “Someone will have heard that.”

“Are you not going to kill me?”

“Are you listening to me? I'm trying to save you.”

“Why?”

Craven sighed. Why? That was the question, wasn't it? Why was he risking everything to save her? He wanted to put her back, to chain up her remaining arm and leave her there. Her, cocking her head to the side – like a confused puppy, too stupid to get out of its own way. And now she was—“What are you doing?”

Minty had bent in half at the waist and seemed to be playing with her feet. Of course.  Only she could pick a time like this to scratch an itch.

“We don't have time—”

“I'm tied to the floor, Craven Lorne,” she told him simply. “I cannot go.”

Craven crouched down to untie her and fumbled with the knots.

He didn't hear Voss's footsteps until it was too late. “What are you doing, Craven?”

Craven Lorne fought to urge to hide. He finished untying Minty's ropes.

“I asked you—”

“I heard you,” Craven barked, and again he had to fight, not to slap his hand over his mouth or beg for forgiveness. “I'm letting her go.” Something occurred to him and he asked, “How did you get her here?”

“Frisco.”

“You're working with Frisco? Voss, he's crazy. He'll—he'll do anything. And you let him—We can't kill her. We can't.”

“We talked about this,” Voss said.

More words than he's spoken in a long time, Craven thought. And come to think of it, shouldn't they have heard his cane when he came in? How long had it been since his injuries healed? Craven could see it clearly now, a flood of lies, cascading down the walls, filling the warehouse. They were wading in them.

“Yes,” Craven Lorne said slowly. “We talked about this. And I was going to do it. I was going to do this for you. And you brought in Frisco in behind my back. You couldn't trust me, could you, even to do this one thing.”

“Look where we are, Craven. Of course I couldn't.”

Craven could feel his fists clenching and had to remind himself not to crush Minty's arm in his hand. “You could have. But you didn't listen! I told you so many times, so many ways—I loved you— I would have done anything for you. But it wasn't enough. None of it was ever enough. You just wouldn't listen.” Craven Lorne slumped forward, exhausted.

“Craven,” Voss said, his voice suddenly honey sweet, like he was coaxing a child. “She has Diamond Dust.”

Craven stared, at Voss, at Minty, at swirl of sparkling mist that was trailing out of her arm and floating on air currents up toward the ceiling. It was supposed to be a myth. White Dust was rare, but Diamond Dust was impossible. It was the most beautiful thing he'd ever seen.

Minty, who had been standing silently since Voss came in, merely nodded yes to Craven's unasked question.

“So you see,” Voss was pleased, sounding like his old self. He let his sentence trail away. Of course Craven saw.

“She really has Diamond Dust?” Craven asked, knowing the answer.

Voss took an easy step forward. “Yes.”

“So this is why you wanted her. You could be more powerful than—”

“We could be more powerful.” Another step.

“And the others? Are you going to give it to them – to Frisco?”

Voss waved his hand lazily. “Of course not. You're the only one I'd ever share this with. You've always been the only one.”

Craven tightened his grip on Minty's arm. “It was never about revenge, was it?”

Voss chuckled. “Revenge. No. That was just an added bonus.” He took another step.

Craven lifted Minty's arm like a bat and swung.

 If you enjoyed reading this, stop by next week for another instalment. You may also like my published novel, Aigaion Girl ... a story of the end of days, available here.

Quicksand - Part 19

Voss sat on his throne and Craven Lorne paced. 

“I know I said I was going to pay her back,” Craven said nervously, stepping around a disused stepladder. “But you've seen her, Voss. I don't think she remembers any of it. I don't think she knows what she's done.”

Voss looked sad. His head hung forward, his mask seemed to frown. His crisp white suit wrinkled in dismay.

“No one hates her for it more than I do,” Craven assured him. “And if thought she knew—or if I thought she did it on purpose—” Craven could feel Voss growing angry. “I know what I said, but I don't think we should kill her. I think she's suffered enough.”

Voss sat up, his eyeless silver mask staring at Craven – and he spoke the first words he had spoken to Craven in a very long time. “You don't love me.”

Craven Lorne tripped over his protests, fought back tears, sputtered, clamoured, begged for mercy and forgiveness, begged for Voss to understand that there was nothing he wouldn't do – only it didn't seem right, and he begged as well, not to be made to kill the rabbit girl.

 If you enjoyed reading this, stop by next week for another instalment. You may also like my published novel, Aigaion Girl ... a story of the end of days, available here.

In Print

Just wanted to share with you this shameless self-plug, in which I mention that I'm listed as a writer in a magazine.

The picture is really blurry, taken by my guy on his iPod (he's a much better photographer with an actual camera, I swear ;)

Ok, I'm done.

P.S. I forgot that I hadn't set it up to auto post Quicksand.  The next installment will go up Sunday.

Quicksand - Part 18

The footsteps didn't belong to Voss. These were not the slow and deliberate steps of a man with time to spare; these were the steps of a fox trying to be silent. Of course, Minty's ears could hear anything.

The door creaked open and a single stripe of yellow light poured in, followed by the furtive silhouette of a man in a hurry. His smell was unmistakable.

“Hello Craven Lorne,” Minty said, her voice hollow and metallic.

The figure stopped in front of her, surprised, then continued his advance.

“Do I die today, Craven Lorne?” Minty asked.

Craven moved toward her rapidly now, with a sharp, whispered shhh!

Minty tipped her head to the side as Craven started to work to release her from the chains. “Will you save me?” She sounded more confused than hopeful.

“Not if you keep talking,” Craven growled. “I've killed some, but there are more of them out there. We have to hurry.”

There was a sound of clinking metal, and somehow, Minty's arms came free. She fell forward, twisted and hit the cement floor hard, crushing her shoulder and breaking her arm off above the elbow. Her scream, though short-lived, was the worst sound Craven had ever heard.

 If you enjoyed reading this, stop by next week for another instalment. You may also like my published novel, Aigaion Girl ... a story of the end of days, available here.